Eilish+B

Welcome to Eily's Wiki :) =A Girl: = = =

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She was such a beauitful girl,she never did anything to hurt anyone untill she met him. It all started on the first day back at school. We were walking down the hall in our group when he walked out from the maths block and looked at her. =====

=2010: =

17.9.10

2010 is a year to remember.Everything was changing,boys,girls,school.School has been good besides when the odd girl or boy fights over something pathic.We went on camp to Hamner Springs for 2 nights and 3 days. We did lot's of things﻿﻿ activies including montain biking,rock climbing,onteering which i really enjoyed and i'm pretty sure everyone else did to.I got into the CSC A netball team and we got into Premier B. My netball went really well this season The season is now over and i will miss getting up early getting ready for my favourite sport.Seven people at St Patricks school including me got into West Coast netball. John Paul 2 high school asked me if I would like to go to Australia in September, I said yes. I am now in my final year at St Patricks School. I think this is very scary because only so many years ago we had just started school and we were shy of the older children. I have now been to Australia and the team i was in did really well. We won 5 out of 7 games and I got MVP which stands for Most Vaulble Player from St Micheals College. They couldn't believe how old i was. I had a really great time in Aussie with the John Paul kids as well and having the chance to be able to play netball in Aussie. We also had a lot of laughs. I am now in my final year at St Patricks School. I think this is very scary because only so many years ago we had just started school and we were shy of the older children.

21/09 Do you have a plan for this bit of writing? It has grabbed my attention now I am interested to see which of these or events is going to be the focus for this bit of writing. Miss Paterson

=Earthquake: = 12.9.10 ==On the edge of town stood an derelict building that no one would ever dare enter now. Saturday September fourth 2010 it all started a day no one will ever forget.4.35 an earthquake happened. It rocked the city of christchurch and rocked the rest as New Zealand. It was an earthquake that was measured 7.1. This was not the alpine fault that has not aruptered for about 300 years.The fault line that has made all this damage hasn't happened for 16,000 years and know one knew that it was there. ==

To Be Finished

=A Letter To You: = 12.9.10

=3rd September 1856= =Dear Max...= =It's taken me two months to find the courage to write to you.I know this might be hard to take in but we need to follow our own lifes and dreams.= =Two years,we haven't seen each other. It was easy at first because i knew you were coming back but now i don't even know if your coming back or where you are.= =This is going to be hard for you to take in but i know it's for the best.=

July 2nd: 12.9.10

It was July 2nd a day i will never forget. It was the worst day of my life,he was at the stage in life that he just couldn't go on anymore. My dad was dying. He had cancer when i was only 2 but now it had come back. He had it last summer but i was not told mum keeped it a sercet. My dad and I were just walking along the beach when he feel to his knees. He was rushed

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16-08-10

I decided to go for an evening stroll down the street to clear my head. I walked about three blocks when I felt something﻿ creeping up behind me. I turned to see if anything was in site, nothing as I thought. I could see a bush moving in the distance. I slowly walked over to the bush, It had a strong pungent smell to it. As i went to walk around the bush I felted a warm breeze touching my neck. I quickly turned around and there stood my murderer. I had only just turned sixteen when I was murdered. My murder was a person that knew my family very well. He decided that he would take my life for no reason what so ever and he sure did. It was the Thursday the 13 October 1988 he striked. It was October,spring time. I had detention after school. My teacher wasn't a big fan of me she made me stay because i was talking when it wasn't even me it was billy. I decided that I wsan't going to go the long way home so I went through the cornfield.I could see my house in distance and started to walk as fast as i could. Out of no where Mr Coates appered the man that lives two houses away from us. He said to me "Would you like to come and see the hut i am building for you children around here". I said "Sorry Mr Coates i can't ive got to get home my mum will be wounding where i am". All of a sudden Mr Coates grabbed me by the arm and took me to is hut he was building.

To be countined Mr Coates my murderer dragged my body over from the cornfield where he had murdered me. For a man like Mr Coates he sure didn't make it oblivious. He made sure that there was no blood anywhere,body parts that he may have chopped off and ever belonging that I had been wearing that day had now vanish. By the time he dragged my body back to his house it was just on dark just the way he wanted it,no way could anyone see him putting me into his truck. Mr Coates after putting me into his truck shot up stairs to clean himself off and get rid of all my belongings As __i__ looked down on my family they were starting to worry about me. Mr Coates obviously didn't have a good bone in his body and didn't really care what this could do to my family. He had just killed me and for what reason I mean I'm just like any other school child, but maybe i wasn't the first child to have been murdered by Mr Coates.

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<span style="color: #ff0000; display: block; font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; font-size: 120%;">//Thank you for sharing this with us Eilish. It is lovely. I have just underlined the 'ed' on left because 'lefted' isn't a word. Well done. Miss Paterson// <span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; font-size: 120%;">Done =====

<span style="color: #ff0000; display: block; font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; font-size: 120%;">//Thanks for sharing your feelings.Thats a very sad poem Eilish:( Briana//

<span style="color: #ff0000; display: block; font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; font-size: 120%;">//Thanks Briana it was hard to write and thank you Miss Paterson for checking that for me. :)// <span style="color: #ff0000; display: block; font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">I just underlined the ' I ' in your story because if you are writing about yourself you need to use a capital letter bur I really liked your story and your poem. It brought back memories of my Grandad. Michael. <span style="color: #ff0000; display: block; font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">//21/09 Do you have a plan for this bit of writing? It has grabbed my attention now I am interested to see which of these or events is going to be the focus for this bit of writing. Miss Paterson//

//18/09 Hi Eilish, I see you have been working on a few styles of writing here. It would be good if you could choose something you have been working on and see it through to the end, even if it just stays in draft form. Everything you have started here has got my interest as a reader but I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes! Miss Paterson//

<span style="color: #ff0000; display: block; font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">18/09 Hey Eilish this is a good start to what could be an interesting and informative report. I have underline a couple of things for you to think about when you are ready to edit. I'm aware that this is in the early stages of draft. I look forward to seeing what comes from this bit of writing. Miss Paterson

<span style="color: #ff00f5; display: block; font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; font-size: 16px;">//18-08 When you proof read this have a look at the tense. In this paragraph you have __decid__e (which gives the impression of now) and then walk__ed__ which makes me think it happened in the past. Just something to think about when you have your ideas down. Miss Paterson :)//

<span style="color: #ff002d; display: block; font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; font-size: 13px; line-height: 19px;">16/08/10 Eilish, I have moved your latest writing to the top of the page so that your readers can see you latest work. I like that you are experimenting with some interesting vocabulary. Miss Paterson Awesome story Eilish, I've underlined some words in there they you misspelt, also I underlined this line "it was just on dark just the way he wanted" because I don't quiet understand it. Well done, Tayla <span style="display: block; margin: 0px; padding-bottom: 0px; padding-left: 0px; padding-right: 0px; padding-top: 0px;">I'm so happy to see that you have started another story. Maybe (just a suggestion) when you go back through and edit you could give some details about what kind of evening stroll it was (like relaxing, brisk, quiet...) and perhaps using some descriptive language about the blocks so we get a feel about the neighbourhood? How did it creep up? Quietly, slowly, quickly...! Great start though. Miss Paterson

=<span style="color: #ff9400; display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 160%;">- Lifes to short to know what comes next. But somthing i will always no is that you will always be there no matter what. =